Hello everybody. This is Justin Time and Ralph MacBook from EnglishClip.com Say hello, Ralph. Hello, everybody. Today we are going to show you some different ways to make better sentences. Here we go. Yes, that’s very important. Here is a writer that is not being kind to his readers. He’s not giving much information. That’s right, Ralph. And as you can see, the writer is very happy because he can see his cat in his mind. But the reader doesn’t know what to think. Yes, he’s just guessing. And the reader is getting information really slowly. Oo’ecky, Justin. Yes, we haven’t got a happy reader here.
Oh, he’s got it. Hang on. Hang on. Don’t start celebrating yet. The reader’s still not happy. Let’s have a look at some of the problems with these sentences. The grammar is okay. Yeah, but they’re very short and they give the information very slowly Start stop. Start stop. Start stop. Readers don’t like that. And we’ve got a lot of repeated words. We’ve got 4 x it, 2 x is, 2 x has. Yeah, I see what you mean, Justin. Ralph, do you think you could put all that information in one sentence? I’ll give it a try. Let’s see. That’s great, Ralph. Thank you very much. Just look at problems. All gone away It makes it very hard for the reader.
Yeah, and it’s very slow to get information. Only 12 words in one sentence. Yeah, and it’s all one idea in one sentence. That’s great! Yes, information. That’s what we need. What important things, Justin? These things, Ralph. Okay, let’s just take a look at some sentences and try to make them better. Ralph? Yeah, er, sure. Sorry, you took me by surprise there. Yeah, that’s good. Nice one Ralph! More information too. How about this one? And this? Spot on, Ralph! Very nice. More information and smooth. How about this one? Yeah, nice and smooth that one. Why didn’t you add any more information, Ralph? I just think there is enough information in that sentence. We don’t want to over do it, do we? Well, that’s very true because if we put too much information in the sentence, then it becomes very difficult to read again.
Yeah, that’s right. Three or four bits of information in a sentence is good. Yes, you’re right. Ok let’s have a look at some other ways of making sentences better. What do you mean related ideas, Justin? Well, it’s two ideas that are about the same thing really. You’ll see. Now, there is no need to be afraid of using these words. Trust me. Let’s take a look at some examples. Yeah, two things done at almost the same time. Yes, the good and the bad about the bike. What he did, with the result. The problem and the reason for the problem. Ok, let’s work on a few examples using these words.
Very good, Ralph. Fantastic, Ralph! More information and more interesting vocabulary too! Let’s look at some important points to remember. Justin. Yes, what is it, Ralph? I’ve got some great quotes from famous writers. Can I read them out? Yeah, sure Ralph. Great idea! That is so true, Ralph. If you read a lot, you will see how to write. Yes, Ralph. That’s a fact. If you write something, read it again the next day and try to make it better for your readers. How many times did you rewrite this presentation, Justin? Oh, about 10 times, Ralph. 10 times! Well, I had to think very carefully about my readers. I want them to understand everything. If I put a word that is too difficult in, they will stop listening and not learn anything. Yeah, I see what you mean. You’re right. I hope this video will help you to make better sentences and happier readers! For more English self-study fun, stop by EnglishClip.com.
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